Wednesday, April 9, 2008

THE HUNGRY WALL

The Hungry Hole
By Dawn Phillips
Word Count 100

See the hole. Watch Amy feed the hole in the wall.
Amy feeds the hole ONE BLUE berry.
The hole is still hungry.
Amy feeds the hole TWO BROWN chocolate chip cookies.
The hole is still hungry.
Amy feeds the hole THREE RED apple slices.
The hole is still hungry.
Amy feeds the hole FOUR ORANGE carrots.
The hole is still hungry.
Amy feeds the hole FIVE GREEN grapes.
The hole is not hungry.
Watch Amy crawl out the hole in the door.
See the squirrels. They're eating her lunch.
Amy is still hungry.



8 comments:

Carma said...

Hi Dawn,
It took me a second read to "get it" but I did and it is funny. I had pictures in my mind about it

Carma
http://carmaswindow.blogspot.com

Donna McDine ~ Children's Author said...

Hi Dawn...great start to your new blog...good luck. I also have pictures in my head. Glad to be with you over at the CWCC.

Warmly,
Donna
http://www.donna-mcdine.blogspot.com

terri.forehand said...

Cute story... I like your blog. Looking forward to learning more from all of the members of CWCC.
Blessings,
Terri
teri.forehand@gmail.com
http://heartfeltwords4kids.blogspot.com

terri.forehand said...

cute story... I am looking forward to learning from experienced authors like yourself at CWCC. Keep up the good work
Blessings,Terri

terri.forehand@gmail.com
http://heartfeltwords4kids.blogspot.com

Jewel Sample said...

Great numbers and colors concept story! I imagined a little tyke sharing his or her finger foods with the critters. The fun part was imagining what the critters could possibly be.

Thank you for sharing it!

Jewel Sample
http://jewelsamples.blogspot.com/

Simon Rose said...

Nice website and some wonderful examples of your artwork.

Suzanne Lieurance said...

Hey, Dawn,

Since you're an illustrator, why not illustrate this story to really showcase your talents and abilities? Wow! Now THAT would be fantastic and really, really impressive!

Suzanne Lieurance
The National Writing for Children Center
http://www.writingforchildrencenter.com

Jewel Sample said...

Love the added twist to the end from last week. Are you going to illustrate it?

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